The Hare and the Tortoise second draft.

Today there was a New zealand play house  group that came to our school to  show us a show about the hare and the tortoise . It was so!!!  entertaining and it took for ages and I'm wondering  how long it would take  them to train with all . Of them changing into all the  costumes in that amount of time  and I will hope they come  back to. The  story we loved having them  in our school at first  I thought  it would very short show but . turned out that I was wrong  then it got longer and longer and the G . Man was losing but then she told  the tortoise to race  the winner known as the hear the  what I saw looked like the hare was acting so . Cool in till he  fall asleep and the   hare walked past and when we were yelling slow and steady wins the race  the hare woke up and thought the shall was a huge weird rock and it fall from the sky and. That was the noise was the noise that woke him up and he went back to sleep then the tortoise started to  run again and we started to make some noise again and he woke up and the tortoise was a rock again then he thought it rolled away then he woke up and . It was gone and he ran away well he tried to the piper came out from the back and he made him stay right where he was then he . Got lured to a cave and got taped the tortoise notisit the hea was yelling for help and he went to help him then he did it came back  notisit G man was gone . Went back saved him came back and won the race in 1st place.