The Hare and the Tortoise second draft.

Today there was a New zealand play house  group that came to our school to  show us a show about the hare and the tortoise . It was so!!!  entertaining and it took for ages and I'm wondering  how long it would take  them to train with all . Of them changing into all the  costumes in that amount of time  and I will hope they come  back to. The  story we loved having them  in our school at first  I thought  it would very short show but . turned out that I was wrong  then it got longer and longer and the G . Man was losing but then she told  the tortoise to race  the winner known as the hear the  what I saw looked like the hare was acting so . Cool in till he  fall asleep and the   hare walked past and when we were yelling slow and steady wins the race  the hare woke up and thought the shall was a huge weird rock and it fall from the sky and. That was the noise was the noise that woke him up and he went back to sleep then the tortoise started to  run again and we started to make some noise again and he woke up and the tortoise was a rock again then he thought it rolled away then he woke up and . It was gone and he ran away well he tried to the piper came out from the back and he made him stay right where he was then he . Got lured to a cave and got taped the tortoise notisit the hea was yelling for help and he went to help him then he did it came back  notisit G man was gone . Went back saved him came back and won the race in 1st place. 

First Draft -The Great Reading Adventure

I have writing about my class assembly .I am on to my editing stage so you might . see some mistakes . Im still working on it and will post my  published   writing next week 

Teina The Great Reading Assembly

Last  Friday we had our assembly with approximately 200 people watching. when I saw the classes walking in I knew it was going to  be a most embarrassing time of my LIFE! Then .when duffy and scruffy was talking to the ordnance cat in the hat was getting ready and my group was to. When the cat in the hat group was up  cat in the hat was walking round in loops .suddenly he stopped and started to talk about thing 1 and. thing 2. they left and went back to their seat next my groups music came on we went out to the front 

And started our act my group was mouri myths. and  legends everyone in my groups name was Riley Jai Lerrel Attama Kiran Tyson Rican. and me I was Maui  and The story was about maui slowing the sun down and at the end we left and went to our seats and watched the rest and the next group 

Was   superheros  next when they got up they were just telling jokes to the person beside them and then the next group was nonfiction group then  they were telling facts about space lions and the moon. And the very last one was the harry potter group they had cool as wounds Hemis wound was a stick which  made him look a tune better and cooler and this time they were telling facts about harry potter then they got back to their seats then Duffy and Scruffy got back up  and Duffy asked sir to hand out the cutifatics and then the assembly ended everyone went on the bus and went back home. But I got picked up by my mum and I started to talk about how nerve-racking it was and she said she saw how nervous I was then when we got back to the bakery that was when the fun ended.

I think this is the start of level 3 because I added lots of elaboration and detail . 

Teina Term 3 Learning Goals

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